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Formative Feedback for Assignment 4

Formative feedback

Student name       Shaun MullinsStudent number                512659
Course/Unit         Self and OtherAssignment number         4
Type of tutorial Audio-Visual  

Overall Comments

A useful attempt to wrestle with the subjectivity of the photograph. A well referenced essay.

Assignment 2 and 4 Assessment potential

I understand your aim is to go for the Photography/Creative Arts* Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to pass at assessment.  In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.   

Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

Notes on, and in addition to, video tutorial [Thank you for sending your notes of the tutorial to me]

You had sent me a word document of my essay with your recommendations added in blue.

A typo correction. (well to will)

To add a quote from early critical writings on photography that praised its accurate reproduction that will be in keeping with my essay.

It’s useful to look at the difference photography made – and the instantaneous problems in culture it created through mechanical (neutral/truthful) representation.

To find a quote, perhaps by Ruff regarding how  photographs conceal more than they reveal under close inspection.

I was thinking more about how the elements of a photograph eventually fall apart – grain/pixels etc.

Alter sentence suggested using, painting, drawing or engraving as a better term.

You have grappled with some of the inherent problems contained within photography. There are a number of different ways into this. Ensure you are also familiar with how Berger, for example, has grappled with it. A great start is to let Bate, Bull, Clarke, Jeffrey, Wells et al do the spade work for you.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

Good evidence on blog.


Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis  

Lots of research on the learning log. Continue exploring the references noted above.

Learning Log

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis  

Clear, well written and laid out.

Suggested reading/viewing


As above


StrengthsAreas for development
  Ambitious Well referenced Reflects your own concerns      Potential to look at other approaches Contextualise with your practice Are there especial problems with representations of self, and others?

Please inform me of how you would like your feedback for the next assignment: written or video/audio.

Tutor nameLes Monaghan
Next assignment duen/a

Published by shauncn512659

Hi, I am an OCA student studying for an Art degree in Photography , my student number is 512659. My e-mail is:

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