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Formative Feedback for Assignment 2

Formative feedback

Student name       Shaun MullinsStudent number                512659
Course/Unit         Self and OtherAssignment number         2
Type of tutorial Audio-Visual  

Overall Comments

An assignment that meets the brief, engages with references and is based on useful research.

Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

Notes on, and in addition to, video tutorial [my notes in italics]

In my video conference with my Tutor we discussed the style of work that I am using which is a controlled and planned method, my Tutor thought that this style worked for this project’s narrative. He could see the influence of artist such as Cindy Sherman and Jeff Wall who both create contrived pictures in order to tell a specific narrative and control the picture. My Tutor mentioned Jeff Wall as my project had been planned using a storyboard to script out my project’s intended narrative in perhaps a similar way that Jeff Wall must plan his epic pictures.

Wall’s images are often made from multiple photographs.

This is what I was aiming for, I wanted to create a narrative that could be related to other people going through their own experiences of being furloughed.

‘Multiple points of view’ – it’s worth looking at Hockney’s ideas on perspectives and Cubism.

I chose compositions such as watching daytime TV and the passing of time as common factors and as my Tutor pointed out, drinking tea a very typical British thing. The Britishness of tea drinking was a very successful subject for Martin Parr as I recall. Larry Sultan, Pictures of Home (1992) and Tina Barney Theatre of Manners (1997) and Cindy Sherman’s, Untitled Film Stills (1977) were still the influencing artists for this project as they had been for assignment 1, as I felt their styles and methods most suited my ideas for assignment 2, being both constructed pictures and constructed narratives.

As a suggestion my Tutor has suggested that I try producing some snapshot photos made throughout a day from morning to evening as a form of ‘sketch’ to see what sort of natural narrative comes out of it and what lessons may or may not be drawn from the exercise.

The aim is to disrupt your planned approach, you have plenty of time to experiment, look at some of the ‘looser’ approaches in the course – Jo Spence, for example.

What if you gave yourself a one hour time limit to produce the assignment?


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

Thoughtful reflections and engagement with sources are evidenced on your blog.


Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis  

Decent research on the learning log showing that you are engaging with the course materials and extending your learning – only good things can come from this!

Learning Log

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis  

Your blog is clear, well written and laid out.

Suggested reading/viewing


See the references above.


StrengthsAreas for development
  Considered approachBuilt on referencesWell resolved technically      Experiment with ‘loosening up’!Contextualise with contemporary practice and wider culture – using referencesFollow up on references above

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Tutor nameLes Monaghan
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Published by shauncn512659

Hi, I am an OCA student studying for an Art degree in Photography , my student number is 512659. My e-mail is:

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